James
Overall I like this one very much, the last line has a beautiful ring to it.
Didn't like the "watery bits" sound wise though.
Joe
----- Original Message -----
From: "James Bell" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Saturday, October 06, 2001 12:33 PM
Subject: New sub: On The Islands
> Back to short pieces. C& C welcome.
>
> ON THE ISLANDS
>
> The sirocco races for Anatolia,
> break itself into watery bits
> upon the headlands
> and bury them in the smoke of spray
> from an internal fire
> eternal in the way waves
> strike out against the land.
>
> As the epithalamium
> celebrates the end of joy
> the epitaph is brief
> on islands where
> it is unwise
> to pick the asphodel.
>
> bw
> James
>
>
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