Excellent Frank. My only doubts are about the pause values attributed to
the line breaks - they vary from comma pauses to para/stanza breaks. Maybe
a couple of blank spaces, frinstance between your lines 3 and 4?
best wishes, John
----- Original Message -----
From: "Frank Faust" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: 26 September 2001 23:05
Subject: Sub - Harbinger
the movement caught my eye
a sudden motion repeated
like a nervous twitch
the clouds are a pure white against blue
high up and distant this bright morning
and in the flowering cherry
a small fantail is ticking its tail
neither a wagtail nor a scissors-grinder
unless very young
but a new bird among the blossom
yet another sign of spring
I will call it harbinger
~
Frank
The Tales of Faust poetry page can be found at:
http://www.hotkey.net.au/~flp/F_index.htm
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