Hi Ryfkah, I like rpt/refrain poems and I like this. The first two stanza's
anyway. The third loses me. Are there current affairs/cultural aspects of
this that I just don't get, but a good attorney would if you were to spell
it out?
But it's more than just that - Cain is everyman in the first two verses
(well, everybadman anyway) and the invitation to now consider a single and
specific 'real' person is, for me, uneasy - I think it's the ref to Madonna
that obliges this so directly.
Also I find the actual execution of stanza 3 less experimental but also
less assured than that which precedes.
bw. John
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From: "Ryfkah *" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: 03 August 2001 02:21
Subject: New Sub: Cain's My Name
Gan Eden #6/Cain's My Name
Cain's my name
Murder's my game
I used to live with Ma
Daddy Granddaddy and Grandam
I used to have a wife
my dear Beth
Ellen She liked to wear
sequined panties
eau de cologne
made just for her
I killed them all
Cain's my name
Murder's my game
I spilled my seed
a coniferous forest
grew like the wind
I made a covenant
with Satan He removed
the mark commanded
me to know my women
do my father's work
Be fruitful and multiply
Cain's my name
Murder's my game
Interpol thinks they
have a complete profile
but I started tap
lessons last month
with Madonna
Shuffling yankee doodle dandy
I may never be found
or need to murder
again
Ryfkah 7-28-01
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