Hi Terri, two reads well but I think one is nearly exceptional. There are
theses to be written on the place of repeats in haiku, cinqs etc - in fact
I read one the other day - and in this poem there might be room for a third
repeat - or rather a homophone rpt. Also - are you aware of the convention
in cinqs that the last line and the first line are a juxtaposed - have a
special relationship which further amplifies the poem?
Ramble, ramble. Which leads me to suggest:
Lego
and Airfix planes
again! they scream again!
miniature men fall down and then
like bricks
Every good wish, John
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Lego
and Airfix planes
again! they scream again!
miniature men come down to earth
like dolls
frozen
replay the scene
a thousand windows burn
and children ask why Superman
was late
Terri )O(
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