Thanks for your careful reading Christina. I wrote
this a lttle while ago and I don't think I'd write it
now. I think it took the exposure on The-Works to
make me realise this.bw, cara --- Christina Fletcher
<[log in to unmask]> wrote: > Cara, I
haven't seen this so I'm using Ryfkah's
> email to comment and I'm not
> sure that the layout is as it should be.
> I like the idea behind this and it works well enough
> for a light poem about
> a familiar situation but I've a feeling that you
> could do more with it,
> either by cutting back or by making the characters
> more convincing. They
> don't really come to life for me. I'm not sure
> whether that's important or
> not.
> bw
> c
>
>
> > << -- >>
> >
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