Frank, I very much like the economy of this and the
vivid images. maybe yiou could omit 'lifeless' since
it is implied by the use of 'dead' in the next stanza.
And how about 'hints of writhing energy' to cut down
on the adjectival content. Well done. bw cara
--- Frank Faust <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > for
months the ornamental willow
> has resembled a lifeless tangled mass
> of rigid twisted branches
>
> today there are green protrusions
> transforming dead sticks
> into hinted writhing energy
>
> a sinuous cat of nine tails
> to flay the back of winter
>
> ~
>
> Frank
>
>
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