Al, This conjures up lovely floating images for me but
I'm not sure I'm really with you. Is there a pause
(comma) after 'sun' in stanza one? That would help my
understanding. The image of the 'imp of doubt' is
superb as is also 'grow a look of hurt'. Thanks,
cheers, cara
--- Al Philipson
<[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> A question
>
> In backwaters beneath
> the sun seeded crystals
> grow, clear edged
> refractive, of fixed shape.
>
> Are yours like mine, their forms
> so clear so bright never to be altered?
> Comparisons agree, relief -
> till you or I present
> the other with our peerless
> facets, bringing the imp
> of doubt to poke inside
> our heads and ask
> "Was it truely like this?"
>
> Amorphous powder falls
> a gesture from my fingers,
> you hold birth's perfect rubies
> and grow a look of hurt.
>
> If I pick out, time free,
> some lucent latticed thought
> of you,
> must I at a question
> cast it back to final
> dissolution?
>
>
> New minted but rough with scurf, any thoughts? Al
>
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