Maryann, I find this ,verbally, very interesting and
it triggers imaginative interpretation. I rather fancy
that it could be a more successful(whatever that is!)
poem if something more specific were incorporated.
but that's just me!
Thanks, bw, cara
--- Maryann Hazen-Stearns <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Hi folks,
>
> I've been rummaging around in some old folders
> getting ready for my book
> signing in a couple of weeks. I found this and was
> hoping to get a little
> C&C on it. Wondering what everyones take would be,
> it's undergone numerous
> changes, should I just scrap it? I don't really
> think it carries much
> weight, if you know what I mean.
>
> ~*~
>
> Scorcher
>
> Man it's a scorcher.
> Like touching finger tips
> to fire lips.
> I taste your salty skin
> and drink your sweet heart thin.
>
> Man you're a teaser.
> Like fish net stockings tie
> my burning thighs.
> These lonely eyes will bleed
> my warm and willing need.
>
> And now you're back again.
> My secret love, this game,
> your eager flame.
> My fingers crack the stone
> that wakes at night alone.
>
> Man it's a scorcher.
> Like evil burning heaven down.
> Like fever in a jungle rain.
> You force these teeth to clench
> your dark and drenching name.
> And so I'm back again.
> My secret love, my very eager friend.
>
> ~*~
>
> CW, Mary :O)
>
> =====
> Good Cheer & Be Well,
> Maryann Hazen-Stearns
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