Shalom Laura

Thank you for the input.

Periwinkles are small black snail found in the splash zone at high tide; I'll
research another fish but mostly likely there aren't many bright red ones
near my coastline.

kol tuv, Ryfkah

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<< Dear Ryfkah,

This is a beautiful poem - elegant and understated - but for me, its mood is

spoilt by two of the words.  The periwinkles confused me - flowers in the

sea was my first thought, but the dictionary gives a second definition of

"winkles," which is less romantic and makes me think of Blackpool and fish

and chips - but is probably what you meant.  And then the Garibaldi, which

gave me an image of a raisin-studded biscuit, but apparently, is also a red,

Californian fish.  I do like the "fire in kelp" line and understand why you

chose that particular fish, but is there some other reddish creature you

could choose? On the other hand, readers in the US are probably wondering

what the hell I'm going on about.

 bw

Laura >>