Cara, your comment came in as mine went out. I've been unhappy about the
booth photograph stanza - I'll have to look at it again. It should be
simple but it seems extremely difficult. I hope that a dedication will help
with the problem of identifying the characters in the poem. I'll ponder on
your suggestion about the water - possibly over a drop of something
stronger.
Thanks for your help and generous comments.
bw
c
> Christina, I feel I'm a little belated in commenting
> on this typically sensitive and well-written poem but
> that's how my time has crumbled. I was a little
> thrown at first because I wasn't sure who every one
> was. In a way I didn't think that mattered-but in
> another way I thought it did. Now I think I know (my
> own version at least). For the sound's sake how about
> 'is still fresh
> though without water'?
> For me 'booth photograph' stopped the flow a little.
> But altogether a good expression of your gift! bw,
> cara
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