I like this poem very much Ryfkah. I do wonder,
however if the repetition of 'assert' is not just on
the verge of being excessive. Would it be worth
altering one or two occurrences, perhaps the title to
'Divine cofirmation'? or the child to 'you claim love?
Well done anyway. cheers, cara
--- Ryfkah * <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > Divine
Assertion
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> Within breath, You assert love
> Yet past death, You assert love
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> Shattered Earth, You assert love
> Cosmic dearth, You assert love
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> Wail sweet child, You assert love
> Wind flees wild, You assert love
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> Paltry needs, You assert love
> Mankind heeds, You assert love
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> Ryfkah spills surprising bliss
> Lord beyond, You assert love
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> Ryfkah 8-19-01
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