Hi there Sally,

Yes, I've received posts both for, and against, the structure I've used
here. I put it on the back-burner for a couple of days and them I'm going
to see if I can rework it into free form or somethin-or-other like that. I
appreciate your honesty Sally, that's why I love this list so much, people
are willing to really tell you what they think and how to improve.

My best to you and your this holiday season,
Cheerwell Sweetie,
Mary :O)

--- Sally James <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Hi Maryann, This reminds me off my own childhood. We did have vegetables
> but only at the weekend. During the war we had very little fresh fruit.
> I don't know whether this is me or not but I found the way the stanza's
> were broken disrupted the flow a little. But other than that the poem
> worked fine for me. Sally
>
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: Maryann Hazen-Stearns
> Sent: 28 December 2001 17:49
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Subject: New Sub: Carrots
>
> Hi folks,
>
> I hope everyone has been enjoying their holidays. I've been lurking
> behind
> the scenes unable to find the time to post, but definitely loving the
> works posted!
>
> Everyone here at home finally went back to work/school and I had a few
> hours to myself...enough to write a poem or two...here's the first for
> C&C
> if you've the time or inclination this weekend. :)
>
> ~*~
>
> Carrots
>
>
> Certainly we were wanting. There was a lunch-lady who
>      could tell how hungry you were by your eyes
> and the way you couldn't ask for more but she gave
>
>      you extra rice without the slightest hesitation. At home
> our closet of a kitchen never knew the smell of freshly
>      peeled oranges or heard the snap of a pea pod. We only read
>
> about peaches and pears in math books; so many and so many
>      make so many. But apples came from the ground
> each autumn in Old Vandyke's orchard. He didn't
>
>      begrudge the deer and us any "dropsy's." Certainly we ate
> till we were sick. The first time we were given a fresh vegetable
>      was at a distant relative's house. My father didn't want to go.
>
> We sat at a table covered with white cloth. There were no pots
>      set out, but bowls of food. There were napkins. I was afraid
> to take my hands from my lap. Aunt Ora passed a bowl to me.
>
>      Perfectly stacked orange sticks, glazed in real butter,
> speckled with brown bits of exotic nutmeg. They shone in the light
>      of the lamps. And Aunt Ora said, Let me help you. Do you like
>
> carrots? Certainly I liked carrots. She spooned the glistening
>      vegetable onto my plate. Yes, of course there was more food
> than that, but to this day all I remember is that here
>
>      was something not from a can. Neither mushy nor tasteless.
> Bright orange fingerlings grown in the freshness of the earth.
>      The books were right, after all.
>
> ~*~
>
> Yes, I admit it...I'm out of practice...lol
>
> Cheerwell, Mary :O)
>
>
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> Maryann Hazen-Stearns
> "Under The Limbo Stick"
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