a classically wrought sonnet,
you work up to the final couplet very effectively, making..
........a quiet face
hides winter's grief and spring's creating grace
..into a 70 degree distillation of the previous 3 stanzas
I wonder, though, if you need the 'as in man'? Could you not rely on the
'face' to tug the reader into a deeper reading?
Terri )O(
----- Original Message -----
From: "David Anthony" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Monday, December 24, 2001 2:45 PM
Subject: After a Snowfall
After a Snowfall
This is a quiet season; nothing mars
the earth's serenity. Above, the night
receives the moon whose retinue of stars
raise lanterns up to view a world of white.
Beneath the flawless surface, out of sight,
held prisoner within the winter's care,
are stunted things that hardly knew the light,
like secret dreams now withered in despair.
Creation comforts those sequestered there
with hope, where all is hopeless and forlorn:
renewal's freshness, and the starting stir
of growth that promises a world reborn.
In nature as in man, a quiet face
hides winter's grief and spring's creating grace.
Best wishes for Christmas and the New Year.
David
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