Hi Sally,
Thanks for the positive response and seeing something that indicated a turn
round. I am much better now and seeing this time in some perspective.
bw
James
>From: Sally James <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New sub: The Peeling Of Onions
>Date: Thu, 20 Dec 2001 23:30:04 -0000
>
>hi james. I think this is altogether much tighter and sharper. I like the
>way you combine the innabilty to cry with the peeling of onions. The
>numbness that one feels in this state. I like the opening stanza and the
>sense of deafness to outside stimulus as if nothing can reach you. The
>peeling away of layers of the onion so that nothing remains but the shards
>of vegetable or the self. It is an extremely sad poem but I am sure many
>can identify with this feeling and it seems you know that this feeling will
>end. For there is a sense of optimism in the first stanza "the loveliness
>of music has not reached me again" as if you have been there before and
>know and want this feeling to end sooner. b.W. Sally
>
>----- Original Message -----
>From: James Bell
>Sent: 20 December 2001 13:20
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New sub: The Peeling Of Onions
>
>Another of those depressing poems. Thanks to all for response to "Unreal".
>This is in the same sequence.
>
>THE PEELING OF ONIONS
>
>It's been days
>and the loveliness of music
>has not reached me again
>
>The ears hear
>though some malfunction in the system
>does not feel - only aches
>
>inside a generalised sadness
>a dullness not even affected
>by the peling of onions
>
>layer by layer
>until there is only
>scattered shards of vegetable
>
>divested of physical
>use for metaphor
>now ready to be cooked and eaten
>
>
>bw
>James
>
>
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bw
James
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