Thanks all ev yer
fr yr comments on the poem! I sense the things yr saying are the glitches
that belong to speech more than meaning and I sense I need to put it away in
the (unopened for months) poetry drawer and then re-read it aloud to see
what my mouth then does (if it uses "ands" or commas etc).
And I don't know if they were womens shoes or mens shoes? I guess they were
both? I don't know. Stockings, however, is probably more a feminine word
these days (even tho I would say I was walking around "in my stockinged
feet" rather than "in just my socks").
And I wonder which came first... the tree in the desert or the one in
Heaton?
I guess, in the more-real-than-poetry-world the shoes ended up in the tree
at some other time than the time when I saw them. In the
but-I-live-in-the-poetry-world-too, though, I just assumed they all got
there at once, and it's almost Christmas.
Oh yes, and Sally's comment about them shining... I had a whispering doubt
when I typed that. But they were shining when I saw them! It was sunny!!!
But glint, gleam, and other alternative words, didn't sound as good to me.
I'll wait and I might riffle through a few words later...
So my thanks,
Bob


>From: Bob Cooper <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New Sub: At The Tree Of Shoes
>Date: Sun, 16 Dec 2001 17:21:07 +0000
>
>AT THE TREE OF SHOES
>*In Heaton Park, Newcastle* (this line is in smaller, slanty, print!)
>
>
>Yet more pairs of DMs, Nikes, Reeboks, hung in the branches,
>hoyed there by drunken students – who, too broke for taxis,
>too early for Sunday buses, had tied them together, swung them,
>then cheered as they stuck, before stumbling further home, carolling,
>dancing the beginning of Christmas in their stockinged feet -
>where they shine, sway like the shoes slipped off by angels
>quietly visiting a stable, not disturbing who’s asleep.
>
>
>Bob Cooper
>
>who'd welcome any (all!) comments...
>
>
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