on 14/12/01 6:32 am, Frank Faust at [log in to unmask] wrote:

Hi Frank this is Sevans criting your long decorations poem. Basically I like
it a lot, its straggly and like cristmas decorations a bit bitty but it all
aadds up to a whole.



> the house is a litter and destruction
> I bought a tree yesterday     plastic     about so high  I LIKE THESE GAPS
THEYRE LIKE GAPS IN THE STRINGS OF DECORATIONS

> the tinsel has been unraveled      streamers of gold red and green
> there is a cascade hanging from the central light
EVENTUALLY IS A BIT PROSAIC IS IT NECESSARY?
> eventually the streamers will be fixed to the walls
> but for now they form obstacles in the centre of the room
> odd lumps of colour in assorted piles
>
> eight sets of christmas lights
> tangled in a squashed wire framework
> last year they formed a santa and reindeer sculpture
> this year they are hours of therapy     untangling and detaching
> three sets do not work     there should be a patent put out
> on the best means of determining which christmas light is broken
> someone could earn good money
ALL THESE MIXTURES OF TENSES AND SHOULDS AND COULDS ETC ARE A BIT MUDDLY BUT
I  THINK YOU GET AWAY WITH IT ON THE GROUNDS OF THE MESS IN THE ROOM>
> an absence of  baubles     there were some last year     nothing now
> perhaps they went with the friend who used to share the house
> perhaps tinsel streamers are enough
> perhaps we better go to the shops again    buy replacements

> no tree is complete without baubles and coloured balls

> THE TREE HAS COME IN A BIT SUDDENLY

> no presents under the tree but it is early still     a week to go
> there are books in carrier bags in assorted corners of the house
> some paintings and sketches to be completed
> presentation frames to purchase for pages of poetry A BIT PERSONAL
> still a week to go before we start the christmas break
> time enough yet for this christmas
>
> there is tinsel in my coffee cup
I think the actual descriptions of the decorations and the room are the
best. I  can see that this can hold a mixture of other thoughts and bits of
information about the people, going into past and future, but this  side of
it seems still a bit straggly, like a kind of stream of consciousness. very
interesting  and fun anyway. I had a guddle in your poem website and enjoyed
that. Ican't quite work the colouring on my emails yet so you have got black
and blue comments.

Sevans
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