Christina, Your coat and washing machine poems are
written into my memory. It's going to be a good
series. I like this one too but wonder about the
brackets (I'm rather fond of them in general but here
they break things up rather too much, I think, and
don't add any more than parenthetical commas would.)
I've put some more comments below. cheers and thanks,
cara
--- Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> This is the last of six sonnets I'm working on
> called 'Sonnets of the Single
> Life'. I've posted a couple to the list already -
> one about a coat and
> another about a washing machine. I'm not sure about
> this one at all so any
> crits will be gratefully received. The sonnets will
> be numbered rather than
> titled if I can ever get a decent set together. All
> the others follow the
> Shakespearian sonnet form fairly rigidly.
> bw
> christina
>
> Vl.
>
> A serial monogamist (like me)
> follows a pattern - special men (like you)
> always attract her. Were you three(Omit
'her')
> when mother vanished?(Relevance not clear)
> I mention this because your kind of charm
> sweeps certain women off their feet (I'm
> one).
> The smiles and sex and sulks (part of the
> form)('thes' instead of 'ands'?)
> are irresistible.
> But as a rule a charismatic man
> isn't a very user-friendly mate -(omit'very')
> think Casanova, Gandhi, Genghis Khan.
> Should I reject your offer?
> Will I miss the chemistry
> of misogyny?
>
>( Wonderful end)
>
>
>
>
>
> christina fletcher
>
>
>
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