Hi Sally,
Did I miss Arthurs poem? I assume it was also called I Was? It's such a
pain not getting all the mails on this list...but, maybe it'll show up in
a day or so...it's happened before. lol
What a sad/melancholy poem you've writ here. Your use of metaphor is
lovely. I've only a couple of minor nit-picks, if I may; S1-L4 needs a
period to end in keeping with the others. And, I wonder if, to keep the
continuity of your metaphor intact, in S3-L1, perhaps a more appropriate
word than poem might be used. Oh, I don't know, something like air, but
you've already used that, you know what I mean. lol At any rate, this is
very nice writing, as always Sally.
Cheerwell, Mary :O)
--- Sally James <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Hi everyone. This is strange. I wrote a new poem this morning entitled,
> "I was". Then Arthur's email came through.
>
> I was
>
> I was the candle
> you were the flame
> You burned me out
> caused me much pain
>
> I was the smoke
> that perfumed the air
> You were the reason
> that I lingered there.
>
> I was the poem
> the breath of your life
> You were the husband
> I was the wife.
>
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