to the countryside of Cumbria
he likes to walk the fells
Greassy, fun. A couple of suggestions. The above last line seems extra.
Here:
unearths a bar of chocolate
he's always finding chocolate
Maybe the first could be a brand to avoid dup choco.
Here:
he says you work eight hours
then you have to cut off
he's been working
with the drugs squad
he tells me about a sniffer dog
I see a bit of form change to avoid the 3 line S but not sure what, maybe do
it in do and add to the S before.
Thanks.
Gary
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