Cara, good form and voice. A couple of suggestions if you please.
Once she was secure in the mystique
of childhood - did not tread on the joins (childhood, she
between paving stones in case she should (she conjured demons.)
conjure up demons.
Now she lives in a suburb
of tarmac footpaths - cannot fathom (and cannot)
the rules of engagement.
Thanks.
Gary
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