Sorta interesting suggestions for Jon's ballad, Anthony, but aren't they
doing a Bishop Percy? I prefer rough music to neat regularity, myself.
best
david
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From: Anthony Lawrence <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Monday, February 05, 2001 9:06 AM
Subject: Re: Sort of a ballad
> Jon
>
> I like this sorta ballad. A coupla suggestions
> in the interests of syllabic music:
>
>
> > Davy Crockett's
> >> lost in the woods
> >> with a pig in a poke
> >> and a bill of goods;
> >> he went out hunting
> >> for the Cisco Kid (colon here)
> >> and ended up ashamed (delete "and")
> >> of whatever he did.
> >>
> >> Baby, baby,
> >> beat my heart,
> >> snap its strings
> >> and make it smart;
> >> New York City's
> >> floating in air:
> >> is it always this way ( delete "always")
> >> everywhere?
> >>
> >> Baby Face Nelson
> >> and Abraham Lincoln
> >> went into the bar (delete "into" and "the" replace with "to" and "a")
> >> and came out stinkin',
> >> and Rip Van Winkle
> >> has a new disguise:
> >> a riverboat gambler
> >> with a pack of lies.
> >>
> >> Mama, mama,
> >> lift my basket:
> >> looks like Chicago's
> >> blown a gasket.
> >> All these people (delete "All". Start with "These people would
be")
> >> would be better off dead (delete "would be")
> >> than trying to live
> >> on the devil's bread.
> >>
> >> There's plague back east
> >> and dust out west,
> >> floods down south
> >> and the north's depressed;
> >> the cargo's vanished,
> >> the wheels are gone:
> >> this wagon's broke
> >> and we won't see dawn. (delete "and")
> >>
> >> Father, father,
> >> shoot my wad,
> >> crack my whip
> >> and bust my sod:
> >> San Francisco (use "Frisco's" and add "fallen")
> >> fell into the sea, (delete "fell")
> >> but nobody noticed
> >> except for me.
>
>
>
> In serious fun
>
> Anthony
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