Douglas
Thanks very much for your reply. I appreciate your comments that 'country
parole' hints of other things and begs more from the poem. I am still
working on this one and hopefully, when finished, it will convey more of the
'loss.'
Cheers
Helen
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>Subject: Re: Poem
>Date: Wed, 12 Dec 2001 08:40:43 -0700
>
>Helen
>
>what I really liked about this, was the turn away into 'country parole',
>which is really neat. I sort of wish that turn had continued to take the
>poem away from the house to some elsewhere it suggested...
>
>
>Doug
> >
> >A Serious Cat
> >
> >
> >One cat leaves
> >and my house is empty of her walk
> >a place for happy chin and tail
> >
> >I still hear her silence
> >and begin to forget
> >that she was ever mine
> >
> >anchored like a stray call
> >she is with her future, a young lady
> >who sings a country parole
> >of deeper energy
> >
> >What is this I hear
> >a tinkling bell
> >a flurry of doves from a neighbourís roof
> >a different whimper
> >dragging heart and black underbelly
> >to release a wire door?
> >
> >another perhaps, from winterís bitter dark
> >a slamming, verandah mesh
> >no doubt, a visitor from over the fence
> >echoing bare cupboards
> >dry throat in search of parallels
> >other than rejectionó
> >crazy for tenuous rattan-chairs, straw mat
> >food to fluff-over white scars
> >a serious cat, petitioning summerís heart
> >leaving nothing behind
> > óthat begins with arrival
> >
> >
> >>
> >>"
> >>.. a cherry when its bloomin has no stone,
> >>a chicken when its pippin has no bone
> >>a ring when its rollin has no end
> >>a baby when its sleepin has no cryen"
> >>
> >>(we learned this folk song in primary school)
> >>
> >>Jos
> >
> >
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> I can always
> go back to
> fertilization,
> kimonos, wrap-
> arounds and
> diatribes.
> Lorine Niedecker
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