Erminia's point about the association of derailment and pain wakes echoes
here (de_real_ment?) and I do think the poem fits into the stanzaic mold,
Alison.
Best
Dave
----- Original Message -----
From: "erminia" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Monday, September 10, 2001 9:30 AM
Subject: Re: More another poem
> I like very much this poem, Alison. The imagery is
> incredibly surreal and real at the same time (when I
> was ten, there was a major train disaster and my
> father took me there for educational reasons to walk
> around the field and observe the disaster, so I found
> it eben more telling). I is remarkable this connection
> of derailment and pain.
> Really good.
> Erminia
>
> --- Alison Croggon <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> > Having posted the earlier draft, I now feel obliged
> > to post the next - hope
> > for your sakes that's all there is!
> >
> > But it probably isn't.
> >
> > Best
> >
> > A
> >
> >
> >
> >
> > sometimes pain seems to be the truest thing there is
> > it sits behind your eyes like a shivering animal
> > whose vision is a foil wretched with reflections
> > even skins are razors luminous with unshed blood
> >
> > and you understand anew the fragility of touch
> > how real and clumsy it is a derailed train in which
> > corpses leak beneath shuddering metal and collide
> > discourteously as the worm wakes in the brainpan
> >
> > sniffing the stench of tears - pain is excess of
> > course
> > and thus shrugged and deadened - there is no time
> > for its midnight pollen drifting through your veins
> > rooting and flowering into hallucinatory lymphomata
> >
> > for shuttered lids and tongues tasting of iron for
> > the
> > impotence of a half formed gesture which gutters out
> > and leaves a trail of rust inside the stilled hand
> > for the clarities which ripple in its silence
>
>
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