Nicholas wrote:
I don't feel yet that your additional three lines add more, at
least not to the effects I am noticing -- an important
qualification. For me, the poem refers to some sort of triumph
over constraint *within* constraint. The added lines seem to
refer to futility whereas I read the poem itself as if it is an
"escapee" from any limiting expectation of what grammar can do,
one that leaves the prison bars bent not broken.
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Thank you, Nicholas! You're absolutely right and you saved me from myself.
I'll delete the three lines added today. You've reminded me to get out of my
own way. Invaluable.
:fp
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